My Taniwha - Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising using descriptive language in our writing we have been trying to paint picture . We all got to invent our own taniwha. We all drew our own taniwha and described what it looks like, what we do with our taniwha and what our taniwha is like. We then read our work to a buddy and they had a go at drawing our taniwha.  

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard-taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here Daniel

The Evolved Endeavor   By Daniel      

My taniwha has a big red oval shaped body. He has a long black neck with spikes on each side of his neck which are very sharp. His head is like a small oval and the same colour as his neck. He has white bulgy eyes. On top of his head he has two antennae. He has a cone shaped spike on top of his head. He has two orange wings with spikes around the edges.       

The Evolved Endeavor has no nose.   It has to suck great big mouthfuls of air into  it's salivary mouth.  Around every tooth sits bits of cobweb.  My taniwha is tino tino hōhā about this and I feel tino pōuri for him. My taniwha has a black spiral tail. The Evolved Endeavor has 4 legs with a half circle shaped toe with three small spikes on the front of                                                                                                                                                

each leg. My taniwha eats too much baked beans so he does big farts. My taniwha is very kind and we do some fun things together like bouncing on the trampoline and go swimming in the wild rough sea. We watched the olympics together and my taniwha ate 3 cans of baked beans and I ate popcorn.      

this is my drawing of my taniwha                                 this is calebs drawing of my taniwha

What I did well: Te reo punctuation.

What I think I could do better:more words

Caleb - What I think you did well: Saying what you did with your taniwha.

What I think you could do better: You could use some different kinds of punctuation (Miss ireland)